Laurents’ English Blog

I really like the fact that you wrote to her that she should be heard and her opinions are very meaningful. It’s very encouraging. It’s not very clear when you say, “rush over to them and scream in their faces.” Who are them? You stayed fixed to the main theme by saying that she will become depressed, (or even instantaneously combust) if she doesn’t keep up human interaction, meaning she must share opinions and ideas. It was clear and very relevant that you were trying to force her to share her ideas and opinions by almost scaring her with circumstances such as spontaneous combustion.  The organization was very created because you made two paragraphs, one like an explanation and the other, like a persuading paragraph. Well done. Your voice was exceptional like always, but perhaps you could try, somehow to include her family a little more, because remember, she is stuck with them for 3 years. Some words like mature and opinion. Try middle aged and view instead. This sentence was beautiful, “Opinions are an important thing in this world, and should be regarded in calm silence, not raw anger or jubilant happiness, and I intend to be heard.”

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